Theses and Sources

Everyone knows that a thorough analysis and persuasive argument needs strong evidence. The credibility of sources is one key element of strong evidence, but it also matters how sources are used in the text of the paper. Many students are accustomed to thinking of sources simply as expert corroboration for their own points. As a result, they tend to comb texts to find statements that closely parallel what they want to say and then incorporate quotes as evidence that a published author agrees with them. That鈥檚 one way to use sources, but there is a lot more to it.

Recall from prior chapters that writing academic papers is about joining a conversation. You鈥檙e contributing your own original thinking to some complex problem, be it interpretive, theoretical, or practical. Citing sources helps situate your ideas within that ongoing conversation. Sometimes you鈥檙e citing a research finding that provides strong evidence for your point; at other times you鈥檙e summarizing someone else鈥檚 ideas in order to explain how your own opinion differs or to note how someone else鈥檚 concept applies to a new situation. Graff and Birkenstein1 encourage you to think about writing with sources is a 鈥淭hey Say/I Say鈥 process. You first report what 鈥渢hey鈥 say; 鈥渢hey鈥 being published authors, prevalent ideas in society at large, or maybe participants in some kind of political or social debate. Then you respond by explaining what you think: Do you agree? Disagree? A little of both?

This 鈥淭hey Say/I Say鈥 approach can help student writers find balance in their use of sources. On one extreme, some students think that they aren鈥檛 allowed to make any claims without citing one or more expert authors saying the same thing. When their instructors encourage them to bring more original thinking into their writing, they鈥檙e confused about how to do it. On the other extreme, some students tend to describe, more or less accurately, what sources say about a topic but then go on to state opinions that seem unrelated to the claims they just summarized. For example, a student writer may draw on expert sources to explain how the prevention and early detection of cancer has saved lives2 but then argue for more funding for curing advanced cancer without making any explicit link to the points about prevention and screening. On one extreme, the sources are allowed to crowd out original thinking; on the other, they have seemingly no impact on the author鈥檚 conclusions.

How can you know when you鈥檙e avoiding both of these extremes? In other words, what kinds of theses (鈥淚 Say鈥) can count as an original claim and still be grounded in the sources (鈥淭hey Say鈥)? Here are five common strategies:

  1. Combine research findings from multiple sources to make a larger summary argument. You might find that none of the sources you鈥檙e working with specifically claim that early 20th century British literature was preoccupied with changing gender roles but that, together, their findings all point to that broader conclusion.

  2. Combine research findings from multiple sources to make a claim about their implications. You might review papers that explore various factors shaping voting behavior to argue that a particular voting-reform proposal will likely have positive impacts.

  3. Identify underlying areas of agreement. You may argue that the literature on cancer and the literature on violence both describe the unrecognized importance of prevention and early intervention in order to claim that insights about one set of problems may be useful for the other.

  4. Identify underlying areas of disagreement. You may find that the controversies surrounding educational reform鈥攁nd its debates about accountability, curricula, school funding鈥攗ltimately stem from different assumptions about the role of schools in society.

  5. Identify unanswered questions. Perhaps you review studies of the genetic and behavioral contributors to diabetes in order to highlight unknown factors and argue for more in-depth research on the role of the environment.

There are certainly other ways authors use sources to build theses, but these examples illustrate how original thinking in academic writing involves making connections with and between a strategically chosen set of sources.

Incorporating Sources

Here鈥檚 a passage of academic writing (an excerpt, not a complete paper) that illustrates several ways that sources can figure into a 鈥淭hey Say/I Say鈥 approach3:

Willingham (2011) draws on cognitive science to explain that students must be able to regulate their emotions in order to learn. Emotional self-regulation enables students to ignore distractions and channel their attention and behaviors in appropriate ways. Other research findings confirm that anxiety interferes with learning and academic performance because it makes distractions harder to resist (Perkins and Graham-Bermann, 2012; Putwain and Best, 2011). Other cognitive scientists point out that deep learning is itself stressful because it requires people to think hard about complex, unfamiliar material instead of relying on cognitive short-cuts.

Kahneman (2011) describes this difference in terms of two systems for thinking: one fast and one slow. Fast thinking is based on assumptions and habits and doesn鈥檛 require a lot of effort. For example, driving a familiar route or a routine grocery-shopping trip are not usually intellectually taxing activities. Slow thinking, on the other hand, is what we do when we encounter novel problems and situations. It鈥檚 effortful, and it usually feels tedious and confusing. It is emotionally challenging as well because we are, by definition, incompetent while we鈥檙e doing it, which provokes some anxiety. Solving a tough problem is rewarding, but the path itself is often unpleasant.

These insights from cognitive science enable us to critically assess the claims made on both sides of the education reform debate. On one hand, they cast doubt on the claims of education reformers that measuring teachers鈥 performance by student test scores is the best way to improve education. For example, the Center for Education Reform promotes 鈥渢he implementation of strong, data-driven, performance-based accountability systems that ensure teachers are rewarded, retained and advanced based on how they perform in adding value to the students who they teach, measured predominantly by student achievement鈥 (http://www.edreform.com/issues/teacher-quality/#what-we-believe). The research that Willingham (2011) and Kahneman (2011) describe suggests that frequent high-stakes testing may actually work against learning by introducing greater anxiety into the school environment.

At the same time, opponents of education reform should acknowledge that these research findings should prompt us to take a fresh look at how we educate our children. While Stan Karp of Rethinking Schools is correct when he argues that 鈥渄ata-driven formulas [based on standardized testing] lack both statistical credibility and a basic understanding of the human motivations and relationships that make good schooling possible鈥 ), it doesn鈥檛 necessarily follow that all education reform proposals lack merit. Challenging standards, together with specific training in emotional self regulation, will likely enable more students to succeed.4

In that example, the ideas of Willingham and Kahneman are summarized approvingly, bolstered with additional research findings, and then applied to a new realm: the current debate surrounding education reform. Voices in that debate were portrayed as accurately as possible, sometimes with representative quotes. Most importantly, all references were tied directly to the author鈥檚 own interpretative point, which relies on the quoted claims.

I think the most important lesson for me to learn about sources was that the best way to use them is to create a new point. What I mean by this is instead of using them only to back up your points, create your own conclusion from what your sources say. As a psychology major, I look at a lot of data from researchers who have created a conclusion from a meta-analysis (a combination of many studies about the same thing). So that鈥檚 how I like to think of using sources, I will look at many articles about the same subject and then come up with my own opinion. After using your sources, it is very important to cite them correctly. Personally, I want to be a respected and trustworthy scholar. However, if any of my papers were to be found without proper citations, all of my hard work would be for nothing and people would be wary about the rest of my work.

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As you can see, there are times when you should quote or paraphrase sources that you don鈥檛 agree with or do not find particularly compelling. They may convey ideas and opinions that help explain and justify your own argument. Similarly, when you cite sources that you agree with, you should choose quotes or paraphrases that serve as building blocks within your own argument. Regardless of the role each source plays in your writing, you certainly don鈥檛 need to find whole sentences or passages that express your thinking. Rather, focus on what each of those sources is claiming, why, and how exactly their claims relate to your own points.

The remainder of this chapter explains some key principles for incorporating sources, principles which follow from the general point that academic writing is about entering an ongoing conversation.

  • Have you ever had the maddening experience of arguing with someone who twisted your words to make it seem like you were saying something you weren鈥檛? Novice writers sometimes inadvertently misrepresent their sources when they quote very minor points from an article or even positions that the authors of an article disagree with. It often happens when students approach their sources with the goal of finding snippets that align with their own opinion. For example, the passage above contains the phrase 鈥渕easuring teachers鈥 performance by student test scores is the best way to improve education.鈥 An inexperienced writer might include that quote in a paper without making it clear that the author(s) of the source actually dispute that very claim. Doing so is not intentionally fraudulent, but it reveals that the paper-writer isn鈥檛 really thinking about and responding to claims and arguments made by others. In that way, it harms his or her credibility.

    Academic journal articles are especially likely to be misrepresented by student writers because their literature review sections often summarize a number of contrasting viewpoints. For example, sociologists Jennifer C. Lee and Jeremy Staff wrote a paper in which they note that high-schoolers who spend more hours at a job are more likely to drop out of school.5 However, Lee and Staff鈥檚 analysis finds that working more hours doesn鈥檛 actually make a student more likely to drop out. Instead, the students who express less interest in school are both more likely to work a lot of hours and more likely to drop out. In short, Lee and Staff argue that disaffection with school causes students to drop-out, not working at a job. In reviewing prior research about the impact of work on dropping out, Lee and Staff write 鈥淧aid work, especially when it is considered intensive, reduces grade point averages, time spent on homework, educational aspirations, and the likelihood of completing high school鈥6. If you included that quote without explaining how it fits into Lee and Staff鈥檚 actual argument, you would be misrepresenting that source.

  • Another error beginners often make is to drop in a quote without any context. If you simply quote, 鈥淪tudents begin preschool with a set of self-regulation skills that are a product of their genetic inheritance and their family environment鈥 (Willingham, 2011, p.24), your reader is left wondering who Willingham is, why he or she is included here, and where this statement fits into his or her larger work. The whole point of incorporating sources is to situate your own insights in the conversation. As part of that, you should provide some kind of context the first time you use that source. Some examples:

    Willingham, a cognitive scientist, claims that 鈥

    Research in cognitive science has found that 鈥 (Willingham, 2011).

    Willingham argues that 鈥淪tudents begin preschool with a set of self-regulation skills that are a product of their genetic inheritance and their family environment鈥 (Willingham, 2011, p.24). Drawing on findings in cognitive science, he explains 鈥溾︹

    As the second example above shows, providing a context doesn鈥檛 mean writing a brief biography of every author in your bibliography鈥攊t just means including some signal about why that source is included in your text.

    Even more baffling to your reader is when quoted material does not fit into the flow of the text. For example, a novice student might write,

    Schools and parents shouldn鈥檛 set limits on how much teenagers are allowed to work at jobs. 鈥淲e conclude that intensive work does not affect the likelihood of high school dropout among youths who have a high propensity to spend long hours on the job鈥 (Lee and Staff, 2007, p. 171). Teens should be trusted to learn how to manage their time.

    The reader is thinking, who is this sudden, ghostly 鈥渨e鈥? Why should this source be believed? If you find that passages with quotes in your draft are awkward to read out loud, that鈥檚 a sign that you need to contextualize the quote more effectively. Here鈥檚 a version that puts the quote in context:

    Schools and parents shouldn鈥檛 set limits on how much teenagers are allowed to work at jobs. Lee and Staff鈥檚 carefully designed study found that 鈥渋ntensive work does not affect the likelihood of high school dropout among youths who have a high propensity to spend long hours on the job鈥 (2007, p. 171). Teens should be trusted to learn how to manage their time.

    In this latter example, it鈥檚 now clear that Lee and Staff are scholars and that their empirical study is being used as evidence for this argumentative point. Using a source in this way invites the reader to check out Lee and Staff鈥檚 work for themselves if they doubt this claim.

    Many writing instructors encourage their students to contextualize their use of sources by making a 鈥渜uotation sandwich鈥; that is, introduce the quote in some way and then follow it up with your own words. If you鈥檝e made a bad habit of dropping in unintroduced quotes, the quotation sandwich idea may help you improve your skills, but in general you don鈥檛 need to approach every quote or paraphrase as a three-part structure to have well integrated sources. You should, however, avoid ending a paragraph with a quotation. If you鈥檙e struggling to figure out what to write after a quote or close paraphrase, it may be that you haven鈥檛 yet figured out what role the quote is playing in your own analysis. If that happens to you a lot, try writing the whole first draft in your own words and then incorporate material from sources as you revise with 鈥淭hey Say/I Say鈥 in mind.

  • Some student writers are in a rut of only quoting whole sentences. Some others, like myself as a student, get overly enamored of extended block quotes and the scholarly look they give to the page.7 These aren鈥檛 the worst sins of academic writing, but they get in the way of one of the key principles of writing with sources: shaping quotes and paraphrases efficiently. Efficiency follows from the second principle, because when you fully incorporate sources into your own explicit argument, you zero in on the phrases, passages, and ideas that are relevant to your points. It鈥檚 a very good sign for your paper when most quotes are short (key terms, phrases, or parts of sentences) and the longer quotes (whole sentences and passages) are clearly justified by the discussion in which they鈥檙e embedded. Every bit of every quote should feel indispensable to the paper. An overabundance of long quotes usually means that your own argument is undeveloped. The most incandescent quotes will not hide that fact from your professor.

    Also, some student writers forget that quoting is not the only way to incorporate sources. Paraphasing and summarizing are sophisticated skills that are often more appropriate to use than direct quoting. The first two paragraphs of the example passage above do not include any quotations, even though they are both clearly focused on presenting the work of others. Student writers may avoid paraphrasing out of fear of plagiarizing, and it鈥檚 true that a poorly executed paraphrase will make it seem like the student writer is fraudulently claiming the wordsmithing work of others as his or her own. Sticking to direct quotes seems safer. However, it is worth your time to master paraphasing because it often helps you be more clear and concise, drawing out only those elements that are relevant to the thread of your analysis.

    For example, here鈥檚 a passage from a hypothetical paper with a block quote that is fully relevant to the argument but, nevertheless, inefficient:

    Drawing on a lifetime of research, Kahneman concludes our brains are prone to error:8

    System 1 registers the cognitive ease with which it processes information, but it does not generate a warning signal when it becomes unreliable. Intuitive answers come to mind quickly and confidently, whether they originate from skills or from heuristics. There is no simple way for System 2 to distinguish between a skilled and a heuristic response. Its only recourse is to slow down and attempt to construct an answer on its own, which it is reluctant to do because it is indolent. Many suggestions of System 1 are casually endorsed with minimal checking, as in the bat-and-ball problem.

    While people can get better at recognizing and avoiding these errors, Kahneman suggests, the more robust solutions involve developing procedures within organizations to promote careful, effortful thinking in making important decisions and judgments.

    Even a passage that is important to reference and is well contextualized in the flow of the paper will be inefficient if it introduces terms and ideas that aren鈥檛 central to the analysis within the paper. Imagine, for example, that other parts of this hypothetical paper use Kahneman鈥檚 other terms for System 1 (fast thinking) and System 2 (slow thinking); the sudden encounter of 鈥淪ystem 1鈥 and 鈥淪ystem 2鈥 would be confusing and tedious for your reader. Similarly, the terms 鈥渉euristics鈥 and 鈥渂at-and-ball problem鈥 might be unfamiliar to your reader. Their presence in the block quote just muddies the waters. In this case, a paraphrase is a much better choice. Here鈥檚 an example passage that uses a paraphrase to establish the same points more clearly and efficiently:

    Drawing on a lifetime of research, Kahneman summarizes that our brains are prone to error because they necessarily rely on cognitive shortcuts that may or may not yield valid judgments.9 We have the capacity to stop and examine our assumptions, Kahneman points out, but we often want to avoid that hard work. As a result, we tend to accept our quick, intuitive responses. While people can get better at recognizing and avoiding these errors, Kahneman suggests that the more robust solutions involve developing procedures within organizations to promote careful, effortful thinking in making important decisions and judgments.

    Not only is the paraphrased version shorter (97 words versus 151), it is clearer and more efficient because it highlights the key ideas, avoiding specific terms and examples that aren鈥檛 used in the rest of the paper. If other parts of your paper did refer to Kahneman鈥檚 System 1 and System 2, then you might choose to include some quoted phrases to make use of some of Kahneman鈥檚 great language. Perhaps something like this:

    Drawing on a lifetime of research, Kahneman summarizes that our brains are prone to error because they necessarily rely on cognitive shortcuts that may or may not yield valid judgments.10 System 1, Kahneman explains, 鈥渄oes not generate a warning signal when it becomes unreliable.鈥 11 System 2 can stop and examine these assumptions, but it usually wants to avoid that hard work. As a result, our quick, intuitive responses are 鈥渃asually endorsed with minimal chec办颈苍驳.鈥 12 While people can get better at recognizing and avoiding these errors, Kahneman suggests, the more robust solutions involve developing procedures within organizations to promote careful, effortful thinking in making important decisions and judgments.

    Whether you choose a long quote, short quote, paraphrase or summary depends on the role that the source in playing in your analysis. The trick is to make deliberate, thoughtful decisions about how to incorporate ideas and words from others.

    Paraphrasing, summarizing, and the mechanical conventions of quoting take a lot of practice to master. Numerous other resources (like those listed at the end of this chapter) explain these practices clearly and succinctly. Bookmark some good sources and refer to them as needed. If you suspect that you鈥檙e in a quoting rut, try out some new ways of incorporating sources.

  • It鈥檚 time to get beyond the all-purpose 鈥渟ays.鈥 And please don鈥檛 look up 鈥渟ays鈥 in the thesaurus and substitute verbs like 鈥減roclaim鈥 (unless there was actually a proclamation) or 鈥減ronounce鈥 (unless there was actually a pronouncement). Here鈥檚 a list of 15 useful alternatives:13

    • Claims
    • Asserts
    • Relates
    • Recounts
    • Complains
    • Reasons
    • Proposes
    • Suggests (if the author is speculating or hypothesizing)
    • Contests (disagrees)
    • Concludes
    • Shows
    • Argues
    • Explains
    • Indicates
    • Points out
    • Offers

    More precise choices like these carry a lot more information than 鈥渟ays鈥, enabling you to relate more with fewer words. For one thing, they can quickly convey what kind of idea you鈥檙e citing: a speculative one (鈥減ostulates鈥)? A conclusive one (鈥渄etermines鈥)? A controversial one (鈥渃ounters鈥)? You can further show how you鈥檙e incorporating these sources into your own narrative. For example, if you write that an author 鈥渃laims鈥 something, you鈥檙e presenting yourself as fairly neutral about that claim. If you instead write that the author 鈥渟hows鈥 something, then you signal to your reader that you find that evidence more convincing. 鈥淪uggests鈥 on the other hand is a much weaker endorsement. As I鈥檒l discuss in Chapter 8, saying more with less makes your writing much more engaging.

    Sources are your best friend. They either help you reaffirm your thesis or offer a differing opinion that you can challenge in your paper. The biggest thing to worry about, when it comes to sources, is citing. However, there are a multitude of resources to help you cite properly. My personal favorite is called Knightcite.com. You just pick the type of resource, fill in the information on it and voila, you have a perfectly cited resource!

    Kaethe Leonard

Conclusion

Like so many things in adult life, writing in college is often both more liberating and burdensome than writing in high school and before. On the one hand, I鈥檝e had students tell me that their high-school experiences made it seem that their own opinions didn鈥檛 matter in academic writing, and that they can鈥檛 make any claims that aren鈥檛 exactly paralleled by a pedigreed quotation. Writing papers based on their own insights and opinions can seem freeing in contrast. At the same time, a college student attending full time may be expected to have original and well considered ideas about pre-Columbian Latin American history, congressional redistricting, sports in society, post-colonial literatures, and nano-technology, all in about two weeks. Under these conditions, it鈥檚 easy to see why some would long for the days when simple, competent reporting did the job. You probably won鈥檛 have an authentic intellectual engagement with every college writing assignment, but approaching your written work as an opportunity to dialogue with the material can help you find the momentum you need to succeed with this work.

  • 1. Here is a passage from a world history textbook:14

    Like so many things desired by Europeans and supplied by Asians鈥攁t first luxury items for the elite such as silk or porcelain, but increasingly products like tea from China for the mass market鈥攃otton textiles were produced well and cheaply in India. The British textile manufacturers focused on the 鈥渃heap鈥 part and complained that with relatively higher wages, British manufacturers could not compete. India had a competitive advantage in the eighteenth century, being able to undersell in the world market virtually any other producer of textiles. Some thought the reason for cheap Indian textiles was because of a low living standard, or a large population earning depressed wages, but all of those have been shown to not be true: Indian textile workers in the eighteenth century had just as high a standard of living as British workers. So, if it was not a low standard of living that gave India its competitive advance, what did?

    In a word: agriculture. Indian agriculture was so productive that the amount of food produced, and hence its cost, was significantly lower than in Europe. In the preindustrial age, when working families spent 60-80 percent of their earnings on food, the cost of food was the primary determinant of their real wages (i.e. how much a pound, dollar, a real, or a pagoda could buy). In India (and China and Japan as well), the amount of grain harvested from a given amount of seed was in the ration of 20:1 (e.g., twenty bushels of rice harvested for every one planted), whereas in England it was at best 8:1. Asian agriculture thus was more than twice as efficient as British (and by extension European) agriculture, and food鈥攖he major component in the cost of living鈥攃ost less in Asia.

    Drawing on this passage, try out different quoting, paraphrasing and summarizing options:

    1. Quote a key phrase or part of a sentence, naming the source and incorporating the quote within your own logic.
    2. Quote an entire sentence or two, providing context and incorporating the quote within your own logic.
    3. Construct an unacceptable paraphrase of part of the passage; copying a couple sentences and change just a few of the key words.
    4. Construct a successful paraphrase of part of the passage; describing it in your own words.
      Write a sentence, with a citation, that summarizes the general point of the passage

    2. Rewrite your responses to 1a and 1b, above, changing the verbs of attribution. How do the new verbs change the meaning or tone of your sentence?

 


1. Gerald Graff and Cathy Birkenstein, They Say/I Say: The Moves That Matter in Academic Writing, (New York: W.W. Norton & Co, 2009).

2. Recommended read: Siddhartha Mukherjee鈥檚 The Emperor of All Maladies: A Biography of Cancer (New York, Scribner, 2010)

3. The sources cited in this example: Daniel T. Willingham, 鈥淐an teachers increase students鈥 self control?鈥 American Educator 35, no. 2 (2011): 22-27. Kahneman, Thinking, Fast and Slow. Suzanne Perkins and Sandra Graham-Bermann, 鈥淰iolence exposure and the development of school-related functioning: mental health, neurocognition, and learning,鈥 Aggression and Violent Behavior 17, no. 1(2012): 89-98. David William Putwain and Natalie Best, 鈥淔ear appeals in the primary classroom: Effects on test anxiety and test grade,鈥 Learning and Individual Differences 21, no. 5 (2011): 580-584

4. A side note: You may have noticed that the verbs used in referencing tend to be in present tense: so-and-so 鈥渨rites鈥 or 鈥渃laims鈥 or 鈥渁rgues鈥. That鈥檚 what academic writers do, even if the piece and author are from far in the past. It鈥檚 called 鈥渢he historical present鈥 and it鈥檚 just one convention of academic writing

5. Jennifer C. Lee, J.C. and Jeremy Staff, 鈥淲hen Work Matters: The Varying Impact of Work Intensity on High School Drop Out,鈥 Sociology of Education 80, no. 2 (2007): 158-178.

6. Ibid., 159.

7. It took me a long time to stop abusing block quotes. They made me feel like my paper was an unassailable fortress of citation! With the friendly but pointed feedback of my professors, I gradually came to see how they took too much space away from my own argument.

8. Kahneman, Thinking, Fast and Slow, 416-7.

9. Ibid.

10. Ibid.

11. Ibid, 416.

12. Ibid, 417.

13. Google 鈥渧erbs of attribution鈥 to find other suggestions.

14. Robert B. Marks, The Origins of the Modern World: A Global and Ecological Narrative from the Fifteenth to the Twenty-first Century (Lanham, MD: Rowman & Littlefield, 2007), 95.



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